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Thursday, 27 August 2015

Hooking in

First try: We have a trade and enterprise group that we have are own business. We have to sell products to make pts and pieces my business is the 4 amigos. And we sell stone necklaces with the low price of 1 pt so come and pick a stone and we will make you stone necklace. so come along and by a necklace 100 pices are 1 pt 1 pt is sort of like 1$






with a ? Did you know we have a trade and enterprise group and we have are own business? We have to sell products to make pts and pieces my business is the 4 amigos. We sell stone necklaces with the low price of 1 pt so come and pick a stone and we will make you stone necklace.With flax strips so come along and by a necklace




with a ! We have a trade and enterprise group that we have are own business! We have to sell products to make pts and pieces. my business is the 4 amigos And we sell stone necklaces with the low price of 1 pt so come and pick a stone and we will make you stone necklace.With flax strips so come along and by a necklace.




Walt: Write introductions that orientate and hook in my audience

3 comments:

  1. Where is the ! in your third paragraph?
    The question sentence in your second paragraph works well to get your reader thinking.

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